这样的开发信，你觉得作为新手可以吗

DearMr.liu
We
get your name and email address from your trade lead on
are in the market for ball pen. We would like to introduce our companyand
products, hope that we may build business cooperation in the future.
We
are factory specializing in the manufacture and export of ball pen for morethan
six years. We have profuse designs with series quality grade, andexpressly, our
price is very competitive because we are manufactory, we are
thesource.
You are welcome to visit our website whichincludes our company profiles,
history and something latest designs.
Should any of these items be of
interest to you, please let us know, We will behappy to give you
details.
As a very active manufactures, we develop new designs nearly
every month, Ifyou have interest in it, it`s my pleasure to offer news to you
regular.
Best regards,
Dafu liu

这样的开发信不知道好不好。
作为初次联系的信件，简洁，展示自己的特点：工厂、款式多、价格有竞争力，并暗示建议客户绕开中间商直接跟厂家合作。因为不知道客户的详情，特别强调有多种品质，这样无论对方是精品路线还是廉价路线，都有洽谈的空间。