新手入行 请各位大神帮忙修改 发信

第一次写发信，不是英语专业，也不是外贸专业毕业的，没有任何经验，求大神帮忙更改，最好能有吸引力点，能够抓住客户的兴趣，跪求啊！ dear sir /madam, it’s my pleasure to contact with you. i am elvis represent star packing limited of hongkong, which is specialized in designing and providing the??jewelry package items, such us boxes, displays, paper bag, pouches, we offer the packing items for our clients many years . we he good reputation in jewelry packing field,??the competitive price and best quality are offered for clients. we are expecting to set up a good business cooperation with your company. our company website is if you he any question, please link our website, and you could understand much more information about our company and products. the enclosed photo is for you to refer your any comments and feedback will be helpful for us,??we are looking forward to hear from you by mail. we will do our best for you. best regards elvis