做外贸的你,是不是经常发了无数封开发信,石沉大海?是不是每次打开邮箱,看到“已读不回”的尴尬,就想问候一下客户的祖宗十八代?
别急,其实问题很可能不在客户——而是在你的开发信,一开始就踩雷了。
一、这5类开发信,老外最想直接拉黑!
1. 长篇大论,像写论文一样的邮件
很多人觉得邮件要“显得专业”,一写就是三四百字以上,大段介绍公司背景、发展历程、产能规模……
拜托,人家客户不是在看你公司的年报!国外客户收信习惯简洁、重点突出,太长的内容反而直接跳过。
❌ 错误示例:“We are a professional manufacturer with 20 years of experience located in the north of China, focusing on dental handpieces and dental equipment. Our factory covers an area of 10,000 square meters...”
人家只想知道你能解决他什么问题,不想看你“念家谱”。
2. 毫无个性,群发模板痕迹重
“Dear Sir/Madam” 开头,下面通篇泛泛而谈,看不出你对客户的了解。
客户一眼就能看出你是群发的,“你都没诚意了解我,为什么我要回你?”
❌ 错误示例:“We hope to establish long-term business relationships with your esteemed company.”
听起来是不是像废话?
3. 过于自卖自夸,客户没你想的那么感兴趣
“我们是中国最大的供应商之一”“我们产品质量全球第一”“我们的价格最有优势”
这些说法对客户来说毫无说服力,反而显得不真实、甚至夸张。
❌ 错误示例:“Our quality is the best and our price is unbeatable.”
客户会觉得:“你说的再好,不如让我试试再说。”
4. 没有行动引导,没有Call to Action
你写了一封信,却没有告诉客户下一步该干嘛?他是该回复你?还是看附件?还是点链接?
没引导 = 没回应。
❌ 错误示例:“Hope to hear from you soon.”
太被动了!
5. 附件太多、文件太大、格式复杂
很多人一上来就丢一堆大附件、PDF、视频链接、公司简介,甚至压缩包。
客户一打开附件卡顿、打不开,直接关掉,再也不会点第二次。
二、那什么样的开发信才让客户“秒回”?
其实没那么难,客户想看到的只有两点:
✅ 你了解我✅ 你能帮我解决问题
那么,好的开发信该长什么样?下面这套公式送给你:
📬 客户秒回开发信3步法:
Step 1:打招呼 + 展现你对客户的了解让客户一眼看出你不是群发,而是认真研究过他的产品/公司。
“Hi John,I noticed your company specializes in dental clinics and that you recently launched a new whitening product line.”
Step 2:简洁介绍你自己 + 明确能提供什么价值
只说关键,不要写作文!越具体越好。
“We supply CE-certified dental handpieces widely used in European clinics. Our latest high-speed model has helped other clients reduce chair time by 20%.”
Step 3:行动引导(Call to Action)
告诉他接下来该干嘛,给他一个明确的动作。
“Would you be open to a quick 10-minute call next week to see if this fits your needs?”
或
“I’ve attached a 1-page brochure — let me know if you'd like a sample.”
三、附上一个真实改写示例
传统开发信(踩雷款):
Dear Sir/Madam,
We are a leading manufacturer of dental equipment in China with more than 15 years of experience...
Our company covers an area of 20,000 square meters and exports to over 30 countries. We hope to establish a long-term business relationship with you.
改写后(客户更愿意回):
Hi Emma,
I came across your website and saw that your clinic focuses on cosmetic dentistry. We’ve just launched a high-speed handpiece that helps reduce patient treatment time — something your team might find useful.
Would it be helpful if I send over a sample or a quick product sheet?